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i.
She sits all alone by the sea
before the empty stretch;
whispered winds wandering through,
without any hope
of a realisation.

ii.
The hush of skin on skin,
such submission in her posture
to shimmy past boulders and pebbles alike
into the vast emptiness --
what a wonderful death it is. To drown.

iii.
Wooden clunk of boats
rocking against the gentle, rippling tides;
brightly painted sides
and glowing edges
and well-ripened lichen and a lining of barnacles
which soothes the onrushing memories.

iv.
Gravel-like hiss of sand on the
sloping route up wooden stairs,
creaky, crumbling boathouse;
faded outlook under grey-blue clouds:
your ship doesn't pass by this place any more.

v.
Maybe that's why these shoes hang,
odd pair as they are,
in these nooses
underneath the water
facing that clear, heavy sky
where we used to walk,
the sun and I.
Thank you all so much for a second DLD, I am indeed rendered speechless! - 06.11.12
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012   General Artist
Congratulations on the DLD, dear one:heart:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012   Writer
Thank you, honey! How are you keeping? :hug:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2012   General Artist
You're most welcome:heart:
Going loco over my excessive failure at accomplishing NaNo,
but other than that, I'm all good. You?
:huggle:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012   Writer
I'm in quite the same boat. I've already known that I'm not going to make the whole 50, but that I'll do my best. :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012   General Artist
That's the spirit! I'll start thinking your way too, thank you! :heart:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012   Writer
It'll be us against the 50k, eh? :giggle:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012   General Artist
That's right! :iconeyeofthetigerplz:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012   Writer
:lmao:
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doublethefun Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012
Amazing work. Your diction is so rich; I can see you chose every word meticulously, and it paid off.
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91816119 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012   Writer
Thank you so much, I'm glad the effort I put in showed. :heart:
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randomlyinspired-21 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Student Writer
I can imagine each scene! :heart:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012   Writer
I'm glad! Thank you so much! :huggle:
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012  Professional Writer
congrats for your DLD!
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91816119 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012   Writer
Thank you, dear! <3
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations and has been selected as our "Pick of the Day". It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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91816119 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2012   Writer
Thank you so much, I am honoured. :aww:
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GrannyJae Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012
what an interesting piece! sad and sweet and melancholic, all at once :)
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2012   Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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MoonlightWillow6 Featured By Owner May 5, 2012   Writer
Hello! It's been a while huh? I haven't looked at your pieces for so long. Sorry.

But, I have to say, I really liked the ending of this one. The last stanza in general, was really nice. It flowed very well. I also really liked the line "What a wonderful death it is, to drown." The imagery in the forth stanza was also really vivid. Great work!
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91816119 Featured By Owner May 6, 2012   Writer
Oh, thank you! It's nice to see you back. :)

I was actually going to ask you - down at #DeviantLITERATURE we are currently in a bit of an Administrative scramble. =virgino0owhore hasn't really logged on to dA for months now. And we recently had our other Co-Founder, ~99TY00 resign. We were wondering if you would mind temporarily stepping up to Co-Founder for =virgino0owhore's position, and we'll advertise for the new Administrative position? Thank you :)
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MoonlightWillow6 Featured By Owner May 6, 2012   Writer
Oh! Okay, I guess that would be all right. We just finished finals in school, so I should be able to help. Could you remind me of the Co-Founder's responsibilities?

And also, congrats on getting to 200 members! You've really worked hard to get this group running, and it shows. :D
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91816119 Featured By Owner May 6, 2012   Writer
That's great. Essentially, you need to approve or disprove submissions, help to run things - you'll be asked to deal more with the running of the group, etc. I think you'll fit right in with myself and ~Ja-mes, that's why I chose you ;P

Oh, and thanks! :)
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MoonlightWillow6 Featured By Owner May 24, 2012   Writer
Ah! Sorry for the late reply. I thought I was done with testing and stuff, but my teachers had other ideas.

So is it okay if I start on Monday? I've got Certificate of Merit testing on Sunday, but on Monday I'm free.

Also, will you need to change my ranking, or do I have to request it or something? And, is there anything else I need to know as a Co-Founder?
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91816119 Featured By Owner May 24, 2012   Writer
That's absolutely fine. :)

I think if you leave the group and request to join as Co-Founder would probably be the best way, but if that doesn't work, then after you've 'left' then I can send you an invitation anyway, so... :aww:

Thanks again!
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vespera Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I think this poem could find a happy home at #vicious-verse :)
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91816119 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012   Writer
Ooh, a new group! Thanks! :eager:
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vespera Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:D welcome
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