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He passes under
the dying streetlamps'
orange halos,
darkening splashes on his face,
cloud-lungs heaving
against the rooftops.
The tarmac, painted with his footsteps,
whispers, purrs,
white lines of vertebrae
tickle along its back.

Lovely glass, shattered fragments
ruffle the curb of the pavement,
strands of rainwater
whisper along the gutter
in hymnal honesty; and sunlight seems swallowed
by the swollen beast of night.
The stars
prickle at the back of his memory,
a nervous pattern of speech,
syllables of iambic chattering
teeth against the cold:

the hotel window, shining with
the gaze of a thousand tourists' wonderment,
is where his own eyes rest,
as if the world is born anew
and love-songs spike the evening air
his life-tousled hair. He
walks on, passes on,
a stranger in a foreign land;
the moonlight seems
to turn about him, embrace his form,
a lonely touch, not quite animate in its caress,

but his love was the colour
of seawater on gravel,
and he would not take the taste of her breath away
for all the world.
EDIT: :excited: A second DD! Thank you so much to everyone who has :+fav:, commented and simply read this. I'm so happy to finally get my poetry featured. An especial thank you to my lovely girl, Stephany for featuring me. :love:
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Given 2014-07-12
Using breathtaking imagery, david and goliath. by 91816119 creates a beautiful setting then delivers a hard-hitting final stanza. ( Featured by HugQueen )
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014   General Artist
i can't believe i've missed this marvel of a poem!! :heart:
congratulations on the DD lovely being! :love:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2014   Writer
Aw, thank you as always, love. :iconsnuzzleplz: :love:
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DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I love the words of it and the imagery, as everyone else ! However... could you please explain why it's Called David and Goliath? I'm so curious and not very good with poetry...
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 15, 2014   Writer
I've had this question several times actually... I tend to just choose my titles based on how I feel, not necessarily something specific to the poem. I understand that that is confusing as it's quite a poetic idea. When I chose it, I was away from home and frankly quite homesick. I felt a longing for the city and felt very small within the landscape. Therefore, David and Goliath seemed like a good representation of how I was feeling, and the Classical connotations drew a Romanticism around the whole piece. However, the reason I like to keep the title 'ambiguious' or feeling rather than telling, is because I'd like to see others' interpretations of how it applies. I find it really interesting to see others' links between the title and the piece. :aww:

Thank you so much! :heart:
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DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Actually, I understand what you mean and I feel sorry I asked ^^" I guess we all have our personal references :) 
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91816119 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014   Writer
Oh, don't feel sorry! I love answering questions like that, because it makes me question my own choice which is really rather impulsive. :giggle:
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DeniseCroy Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hehe ! 
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91816119 Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2014   Writer
:)
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takemetoverona Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Student Writer
I love the language and imagery in this- my favourite bit is "strands of rainwater/ whisper along the gutter/ in hymnal honesty". Congratulations on the DD! :heart:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014   Writer
Thank you, thank you, so much my dear! :huggle:
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zafira241 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is..beautifull.....Snif..Is Beautiful..Onion 
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014   Writer
Thank you, honey! :hug:
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zafira241 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
No, problem well Diserved DD
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
I’m very happy for you!!! :iconloveloveplz: :tighthug:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014   Writer
Thank you so kindly, love! :glomp:
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Student General Artist
Congratulations! Heart 
That's simply amazing, a very well deserved DD Clap 
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014   Writer
Thank you, honey. :tighthug:
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AlwaysRainCheck Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014  Student General Artist
My pleasure, darling. Tight Hug 
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AndanteEcho Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Student Writer
Beautiful! Congratulations. 
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 13, 2014   Writer
Thanks, dear! :heart:
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saltwaterlungs Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Yay for the DD! :clap:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
:squee: Thank you so much, lovely! :glomp:
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LeftUnfinished Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Gorgeous. :heart:  
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
Thank you, hon. <3
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beeinthebottle Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
This is lovely. :heart: Congratulations on your very well-deserved DD.
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
Thank you so kindly, love! :hug:
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Snorthweast1 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014
Wow, deep. And congrats on the DD!
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
Thank you so kindly, dear! :huggle:
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Snorthweast1 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014
You are so welcome!
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AyeAye12 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Student Writer
Ahh, you got a DD :excited:
Well well done!!
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
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Thank you so much, lovely! :tighthug:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :love: by CookiemagiK
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
Thank you so much, sweetie! And the very same to you. :tighthug:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure, thank you! :love: by CookiemagiK
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
Thank you, dear! :heart:
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
Thank you kindly. :rose:
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
:blush:

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greenemerald200 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Student General Artist
Whoa. I love it!
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
Thank you so much! :heart:
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prolixity Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Shades of Eliot. Beautiful.
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2014   Writer
:faint: What a complement! Thank you, dear. :hug:
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carpefuckingdiem Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
the last stanza stole my breath 

you write beautifully 

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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 10, 2014   Writer
Thank you kindly, sweetie. :huggle:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
An amazingly beautiful job as always. Spectacular job! 
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91816119 Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014   Writer
Thank you, sweetie! :hug:
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CelestialMemories Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome!
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anapests-and-ink Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is one of those that hits you right in the chest.  Gorgeous, gorgeous poem.
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